Friday, October 7, 2011

Prepare


Moist. Moist. Moist. A hated word, but accurate for her surroundings. Water dripped from every surface, horizontal or vertical. Drip. Drip. Drip. It was also dripping off her skin. The minutiae of her body's contours, hairs, pimples, cuts, scars, fat, dictated the path the rivers of water took as gravity's uncompromising grip drew it down and away. The escaping water was also taking the warmth with it. Stupid physics. One last time she leaned her forehead to the smooth wall in front of her, closed her eyes and took a deep, moist breath, trying to make it reach her toes before expelling in. Then she turned to part the curtain that blurred the outside world and stepped into her day.

5 comments:

  1. Isn't it weird that a shower can actually make you feel less wet sometimes?

    I know the "trying to make it reach [your] toes" feeling all-to-well.

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  2. Oh, I love this line: "The escaping water was also taking the warmth with it."

    I felt like I was there with you...in a non-creepy way, of course. :)

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  3. This:

    The escaping water was also taking the warmth with it. Stupid physics.

    is perfect. And the reason I take showers that are much too hot.

    Great job :)

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  4. I love the unflinching nature of this line: "The minutiae of her body's contours, hairs, pimples, cuts, scars, fat, dictated the path the rivers of water took as gravity's uncompromising grip drew it down and away."

    I like it so much, I think it should actually be the opening of the piece.

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  5. Anytime, Nicole. ;-)
    Hot showers are the best.
    Cameron, I definitely feel like that is the anchor line.

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